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1.      I try to alter my title, the title I used before can not express what I want to say in this annotation, so I write another title to change it.

2.      I read the advice from teacher and give me some new idea that I didn’t think before in this annotation. I will try to discuss it. It is about why poor people keep living in poor life style, and the connection with the rich and the society.

3.      I want to talk about nowadays money slave, and make more examples to prove it.

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                Poverty was not cause by the poor but by the society and psychology poverty

     In this society, people keep working hard for money. But, why people always desires for fortune and power? Do we really need such lots of money to prevent from being poor? Many news about doctors’ overworks which cause their death gradually be heard, on top of that, some areas in Africa which once to be the colonies are always in the condition of poverty. They do not have any vacant lot to plant foods, every area in their country were used to plant for economical crops like cotton and hemp. Human being works so hard to giant their fortune not for the short of substance, but for their true poverty of their psychology- they will never satisfied with what they have already own.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TPk2gRuIdj0&feature=player_embedded

     In the video: Muhammad Yunus - Grameen Bank, he talked about economical activities in rural village. Women who made bamboo furniture had to take out usurious loans for buying bamboo, to pay their profits to the moneylenders. Here express a question that is always happening in all over the world. The poor keep working hard and try to depart from poverty, however sometimes, it is not their fault to being poor; it means that the poor living style is not made by them. It is because the society system and vicious oppression from powerful group as their boss or the businessmen that causes their terrible economy condition. For example, not only the woman’s story which Yunus talked in the video, but also the diamond industry in Africa. I saw a movie called Blood Diamond before, and it was talking about the serious problems of illegal diamond collection in Africa. The diamond has become the cause of fight between government soldiers and rebel forces. To the rebel forces, diamond is the source of income for war, therefore, many people has lost their calm live, family relatives and even their own limbs in the war. Thousands of people became refugee. The children soldiers were killed in the war, diamond miners were living a depressing life, those plots in the film actually exist, and some are under an even worse condition. Diamonds may bring people wealth and happiness, but it brought people in Africa war and suffers. What is the reason that causes the diamond miners’ poverty? It is the same reason as the example that Yunus has expressed- the exploit from the powerful group and the man who manage the economic. Society keeping exploits the poor and cause their poverty. Their hard working still cannot bring them depart from terrible economic problem. The same condition also happens in Taiwan, it is about the rights of banana famers.

      Besides, Yunus made an example by being a slave to explain how terrible the economy condition in Bangladesh. That woman was willing to accept this kind of deal to exchange for money; she was in force to do that because of the poverty that may cause her family’s starvation. When I see this video, I thought that not only she, but all of us were the slave for fortune. But the different between people in developed country and that woman is the reason they desired for money. That woman needed money to get some food and maintained her basic life, how about people in developed country, why they also became the slave of money? Do they short of food? No, it was because they didn’t satisfied with their life and always desired for more power and more space to live.

     There are two different terms that cause different poverty. For the rich, it is the psychological poverty that makes them feel the lake of power and fortune; but for the poor, it was the fatal society condition that cause their poverty which may force them to hand over their life.